You recently signed up for a six-week evening course at your local community centre, but a family commitment now overlaps with two of the sessions. Write an email to the course coordinator. In your email:
Dear Ms. Tanaka,
I'm writing about the "Introduction to Conversational French" course I registered for last week, which begins on May 6. After signing up, I learned that my sister's wedding falls on the same weekend as two of the sessions — Friday, May 17 and Saturday, May 18 — and I won't be able to attend either evening.
Because the course builds week by week, I'm worried about falling behind on the conversation drills. Would it be possible to access the slides or a recording from those two sessions, or to meet briefly with the instructor beforehand so I can review what I miss? I'd also be happy to do extra practice on my own if there are recommended exercises.
I want to be clear that I'm still fully committed to finishing the course. The remaining four sessions work for me without any conflicts, and I'm looking forward to them. Thank you for your understanding, and please let me know what options might be available.
Sincerely,
Daniel Park
All three required points are addressed and given roughly equal weight: the situation (paragraph 1), the make-up request with two concrete options (paragraph 2), and the commitment confirmation (paragraph 3). Each paragraph has a clear topic, and linking words ("because", "also", "I want to be clear") move the reader between ideas.
Range without flashiness. Notice the precision in:
No word is repeated within three sentences except short function words. That alone keeps the band above 7.
Sentence variety is the headline: paragraph 2 alone has a complex sentence ("Because the course builds…"), a polite request with embedded clauses, and a short offer ("I'd also be happy to…"). Punctuation is clean. There are no errors that block meaning.
Formal register matches "course coordinator" rather than a friend. Greeting and sign-off are appropriate. The email is exactly within the 150–200 word window, and every prompt bullet is visibly addressed.
A slightly more sophisticated structure in paragraph 3 (a subordinate clause anticipating the coordinator's concern) and one or two more idiomatic phrases would lift the Vocabulary and Readability bands. At CLB 9, however, the response is already a confident pass.